Hello Marina, David below has done some corrections to your essay but there is another vitally important aspect of IELTS writing which is the organisation of your essay. This is a criteria for the assessment, so it is worth spending some time on. Here is my advice. The type of question above is an opinion essay, which means you need to start the essay with a clear statement of your opinion - do you believe this has improved the way people live, or not? Once you state your opinion you only need to provide a few arguments to support it and the body of your essay should be a new paragraph for each argument with explanation and examples. Your conclusion should then just summarise your arguments and re-state your opinion on the topic. It's also good to 'signpost' your essay, e.g. in your introduction "I believe the way we prepare food today has improved our lives for three main reasons which I will describe in this essay" and then each paragraph can begin with "Firstly", "Secondly", "Finally" to introduce each argument. Hope that helps - remember that language range and accuracy are only 1 criteria in IELTS; the way you clearly and logically present your writing to the reader is also an important criteria and you are assessed on this. Stephen.
Essay for IELTS
Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare, but has this improved peoples' lives?People all over the world are becoming busier and busier and have less free time. Despite this, they still have to eat. This is the a worrying trend since it results since it results in development of fast food industry because more and more people are eating fast food as a result. and upping of some This is leading to health problems like global obesity.
Modern technology allows people tendencies of healthy lifestyle make to create new ways of cooking high quality food faster and easier. One of the most important kitchen devices is multi cooker, which allows you to prepare a healthy meal in a short time as possible. Also the variety of goods in supermarkets gives you an the opportunity to choose fresh and natural foodstuffs.
That’s why a growing number of people prefer to cook a their lunch at home, and take it to work in special lunch boxes. They are usually made out of heatproof microwaveable plastic and which can be used in a microwave oven.
So, these things can help people to save time for cooking and reheating food and improve their way of life.
When men people spend less time for fulfilling their basic needs, they can use their saved hours time for developing personal or professional skills, spend time with family or friends, or just have a rest. Thus the society becomes more productive. and dynamically developing.
Looking into the future, I would like to imagine that one time day the that technology of Internet of things will allows us to create cooking robots, which will prepare food by themselves without our physical intrusion assistance. We will just send tell them an SMS with the command to prepare a dinner when we like.
To summarize, I believe that the utilisation using of modern technologies helps people to save valuable time and to spend it for more important things. and In addition, it allows them to lead a healthier lifestyle. keep fit
