다양한 영어 선생님을 검색해 보세요...
Haruka
During Silver Week, my part-time job was very busy. There were many, many people at my workplace. I helped a lot of customers. I think I helped hundreds of people. I was very tired after work. There were too many people, so I was very busy all day. I want Silver Week to finish soon. Also, my club performance is coming soon. So, I am practicing dancing now. But I cannot remember the dance well. There are many steps, and I often forget them. I am worried about the performance. I want to dance well in front of many people. I still have some time before the performance, so I will practice more. I want to remember all the steps and have fun with my friends. I will do my best!

교정 · 2

1
During Silver Week, I was crazy busy at my part-time job. My workplace was packed and I ended up helping hundreds of customers. It was so busy that I just wanted Silver Week to be over. I was shattered after work! Also, my dance club performance is coming soon so I've been practicing a lot! However, I’m having trouble remembering all the choreography - there are so many steps, and I keep forgetting them. I am worried about the performance but I really want to dance well in front of a big crowd. I still have some time left so I'll keep practicing I want to nail all the steps and have fun with my friends. I will do my best!
This is great! I had no problem understanding, the grammar is accurate. I have made a few changes here and there, keeping the casual, energetic vibe.

더 빨리 진행하고 싶나요?

이 학습 커뮤니티에 참여하고 무료로 연습해보세요!

집에서 편안하게 언어를 배울 수 있는 기회를 놓치지 마세요. 경험 많은 강사진을 살펴보고 지금 바로 첫 수업을 신청하세요!

오늘 학습 시작하기