I found a video from YouTube adventitiously this afternoon. The video tells the living conditions of Afghanistan people from the 1960s to the 1970s. The video focuses on Afghan people especially women. In the video, people’s life style and apparel were just same as the western. I didn’t see women wear burqa, which is literally far from my imagination. Compared with the present, it became completely different world.
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I came across an interesting video from YouTube this afternoon. The video shows the living conditions of people from Afghanistan in the 1960s to the 1970s. The video focuses on Afghan people especially women. In the video, the people's lifestyle and apparel were just same as the Western countries. I didn’t see any women wearing a burqa, which is literally far from my expectations. Compared with the present, it's a completely different world.
That's an interesting topic to write about. Overall, it's good. I've made some corrections for you. "Adventitiously " is a very rare word. I know what you're trying to say, so it's more common to say "I came across". It shows that you weren't looking for it.
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