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As the development of internet, you can enjoy your life without going out, ordering food, working from, you can even make friends online. More and more people making friends online. It's convenient, because you don't need to go out. And also you can make friends further, such as international friends, to exchange your languages, cultures, experiences...etc. Even though, making friends online is riskier, because it's easier to cheat, but a lot of people are really sincere to make friends online. I know my best friend in France online, she is so nice, we communicate very well, and we have a lot of thing to share. Anyway, I think make friends online is a good choice, but it's better to be vigilant.
2024년 4월 3일 오후 11:29
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As the internet developed a lot, you can enjoy your life without going out, order food, work from home and you can even make friends online. More and more people are making friends online. It's convenient because you don't need to go out and you can even make international friends to exchange your languages, cultures, experiences...etc. Even though making friends online is riskier because it's easier to be cheated, (you don’t need to use “but” to introduce the next clause of your sentence if you used “even though” in the previous clause) a lot of people are really sincere when it comes to making friends online. I’ve met my French best friend online, she is so nice, we communicate very well and we have a lot of things to share. Anyway, I think making friends online is a good choice, but it's better to be vigilant.
Good piece of writing, just be careful with the way you use commas (,), you tend to use them a bit too much.
2024년 4월 4일
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