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Essay: Advantages and disadvantages of more robots. Technology is producing more gadgets with sophisticated applications. So in Europe, Asia or USA, a citizen can buy robots like pets, assistants or servants. As a result, people enjoy buying modern robots in order to follow this tendence. But we should think over about the presence of this machines in our lives. In the one hand, these smart gadgets may help with household chores like ironing, washing up, cleaning, etc. Consequently, the owner can relax or share time with his family. Also, this free time could improve the quality of life of the people. In the other hand, robots are really expensive, and their production causes pollution. Also, these may break down, so people must pay for the reparation, in others words, it may increase the cost of living. In conclusion, human being should beings should think carefully before buying robots, because it could affect their physical skills, although it has a positive effects in case of pandemic.
2024년 4월 14일 오전 2:18
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Essay: Advantages and disadvantages of more robots. Technology is producing more gadgets with sophisticated applications. So in Europe, Asia or the USA, a citizen can buy robots that function as pets, assistants or servants. As a result, people enjoy buying modern robots in order to follow this tendency. (This sentence basically just repeats the previous sentence). But we should think about the presence of these machines in our lives. On the one hand, these smart gadgets may help with household chores like ironing, washing up, cleaning, etc. Consequently, the owner can relax or share time with his family. This free time could improve the quality of life of the people. On the other hand, robots are really expensive, and their production causes pollution. Also, they may break down, so people must pay for the repairs, in others words, it may increase the cost of living. In conclusion, human beings should should think carefully before buying robots, because it could affect their physical skills, although it has positive effects in case of pandemic. (For the last sentence, grammar may be okay, but I can't understand what it means).
I mostly just corrected grammar - didn't attempt to make it more natural, change the style, etc. REPAIRS and REPARATION are somewhat different - confusing I know.
2024년 4월 14일
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