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Please help me correct this essay. Thanks a lot! "How do parents protect their children from being affected the negativity contents when going online? In my opinion, there have lots of ideas for parents to protect their children from being affected the negativity contents when going online. In this essay, I just point out some the realistic ways and may apply easily. 1. The first one is the most important thing: Always taking time to listen and sharing with your children about what happened around them. That may be a fault or just an aimless story but it’s able to help children not spending lots of time online and use electrical devices. Besides that, this way may increase the bond between family members. 2. When covid 19 pandemic broke out, children just can stay at home and can’t go to school. So online classes are the effective solution to support them to be able to continue studying. However, parents should control their time on using the Internet by checking history and the time of using. 3. Parents should explain the benefits and dangers when going online, from that their children can self control as well as build a helpful habit that align with the demand of their study. Overall, If unsupervised by adults, childrend can be enticed to see contents that contained violent, negativity or other offensive materials. That can lead to serious behavioral, ethical and cognitive distortions.
2023년 5월 21일 오전 8:03
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Please help me correct this essay. Thanks a lot! "How do parents protect their children from being affected by negative online content? In my opinion, there are lots of ideas for parents to protect their children from being affected by negative online content. In this essay, I will point out some of the ideas that can be easily applied. 1. The first one is the most important thing: Always take the time to listen and share with your children what is happening around them. Communicating with your children will take away from the time they spend online. In addition, this may increase the bond between family members. 2. When the covid 19 pandemic broke out, children had to stay at home and couldn’t go to school. So online classes was the effective solution that permitted them to continue studying. However, parents should control their children's Internet use by checking the history and the amount of time online. 3. Parents should explain the benefits and dangers of going online; from that their children can develop self-control as well as build helpful habits that align with the demands of their study. Overall, if unsupervised by adults, children can be enticed to see content that contains violent, negative or offensive material. This can lead to serious behavioural, ethical and cognitive effects.
The question has some grammatical problems, but be careful how you say that to your teacher! This is very well done. I hope that is helpful.
2023년 5월 21일
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