The Tim じぁん!!!
Spring festival Today’s the last day of this year. We’re celebrating it right here. Music’s on, but no one wants to hear. Because my dad’s juggling with no gear. And there’re only Coronas set near. He’s drunk and that’s pretty much clear. All I can hear is someone yelling OH DEER. Then he’s soaked through with beer. It’s such a scene I’d share with a peer. And I am fiddling with my cat’s right ear.
2022년 1월 31일 오전 9:42
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Spring festival Today’s the last day of this year. We’re celebrating it right here. Music’s on, but no one wants to hear. Because my dad’s juggling with no gear. And there are only Coronas (?) set near. He’s drunk and that’s pretty much clear. All I can hear is someone yelling OH DEAR. Then he’s soaked through with beer. It’s such a scene I’d share it with a peer. And I am fiddling with my cat’s right ear.
Ha ha an excellent poem. Well done. We don't really write "there're", but we say it. It can however be written in direct speech ( we're getting technical heer). Not sure what you meant by coronas- circle of light around a luminous body? But I have got to say I loved your poem. Thank you making me smile :-)
2022년 1월 31일
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Spring festival Today’s the last day of this year. We’re celebrating it right here. Music’s on, but no one wants to hear. Because my dad’s juggling with no gear. And there’re only Coronas set near. He’s drunk and that’s pretty much clear. All I can hear is someone yelling OH DEER. Then he’s soaked through with beer. It’s such a scene I’d share with a peer. And I am fiddling with my cat’s right ear.
typo- it's technical here ( not heer)
2022년 1월 31일
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