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Nastia
Hello Italki tutors!
Would be grateful if you could check my response to the IELTS Writing Task 2 on the pic
Many thanks in advance!🌱
Nowadays, the usage of airplanes for travel has increased dramatically. This is because of their affordability and speed. As a result, people can plan their trips abroad without any major hurdles.
One of the primary reasons for the growing role of air travel is due to its price and quality ratio. In other words, it is an affordable mode of transport and less time-consuming compared to others. As a result, people opt for the planes because they do not want to squander their time and money getting by car or by ship to their destination. To illustrate, such low-cost carriers as Ryanair or Wizzair have been in huge demand lately because they enable travellers to get from one city to another within a blink of an eye and virtually for nothing.
The consequences of this trend have favourable effects on society. This is because people are able to plan their vacation in no time at all. Should a person decide to go abroad for a weekend or make a one-day business trip to another continent, with the help of planes it would be more than possible with the help of planes. For instance, to get from Chisinau to Istanbul one may need to pay only 20 dollars, and the flight would last around 1,5 hours, leaving a traveller with plenty of time to enjoy a pleasant weekend abroad.
To conclude, the increase in global air travel largely amounts to the benefits the air industry delivers to its clients since their money and time are valued. This brings about positive change in the lives of people allowing them to effortlessly transcend the boundaries of their countries when needed.
2024년 6월 5일 오전 6:23
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Nowadays, the usage of
airplanes for worldwide travel has increased dramatically. This is because of their
affordability and speed. As a result, people can plan their trips abroad without
any major hurdles. One of the primary reasons for the growing role of air travel
is due to its price and quality ratio. In other words, it is an affordable mode
of transport and less time-consuming compared to others. As a result, people opt
for planes because they do not want to squander their time and money going
by car or by ship to their destination. To illustrate, low-cost carriers such as
Ryanair or Wizzair have been in huge demand lately because they enable
travellers to get from one city to another within the blink of an eye and
virtually for nothing. The consequences of this trend have had favourable effects on
society. This is because people are able to plan their vacation in no time at
all. Should a person decide to go abroad for a weekend or have a one-day
business trip to another continent, with the help of planes it is more
than possible. For instance, to get from Chisinau to
Istanbul one may only need to pay around 20 dollars, and the flight lasts around
1.5 hours, leaving a traveller with plenty of time to enjoy a pleasant weekend
abroad. To conclude, the increase in global air travel is largely due to the
benefits the air industry delivers to its clients since their money and time are
valued. This brings about positive change in the lives of people allowing them
to effortlessly cross the borders of their countries whenever they want.
Again, this is generally pretty good with some nice expressions. While it is clear that you support the idea that air travel is a good thing, you don’t explicitly state it. While your answer is fine, I suspect that it would be worthwhile mentioning “green” issues such as the impact on the environment.
2024년 6월 5일
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