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Recently, there are many Christmas goods or gifts in town, streets, and shops. I love Christmas because it reminds me when I was young, and this season gives me presents. When I was young, I wanted toy or video game. I wished to Santa, and I wrote him a letter. But now, I want clothes, CDs, and my favorite idol’s goods. I wish someone would present me them…
I have no enough money, but I want to shopping in Christmas market. The day before yesterday, I looked pretty red sweater. I wanted to buy it!!! But I couldn’t… I will go to Tokyo Disney Land in my birthday with my friend and Fukuoka in the end of year. So I have to get new clothes. For this, I have to part time job. I often have it three times a week. It’s hard to balance school and work. But I always do my best! I should I’ll take care of my health.
Actually, when I going to Fukuoka, I can go to the concert! I’m very looking forward to it!! And it’s a twice to visit there in this year. In April 29th, I went to there in the first time. It’s a great memory in this year, so I want to make bigger memories with my friend.
2025년 12월 3일 오전 7:34
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Recently, there are many Christmas decorations and gifts popping up in town, on the streets, and in shops. I love the Christmas season because it reminds me of when I was young, and getting presents. When I was young, I wanted toys or video games. I wrote Santa a letter filled with wishes. But now, I want clothes, CDs, and my favorite idol’s merchandise. I wish someone would give me them… I have no enough money, but I want to
shop at the Christmas market. The day before yesterday, I saw a pretty red sweater. I really wanted to buy it, but I couldn’t…
I will go to Tokyo Disney Land on my birthday with my friend and to Fukuoka at the end of year. So, I have to get new clothes. For this, I have to work a part time job. I often work three times a week. It’s hard to balance school and work, but I always do my best! I should take care of my health. When I go to Fukuoka, I can go to the concert! I’m really looking forward to it!! It’s my second time visiting there this year. On April 29th, I went there for the first time. It’s a great memory from this year, so I want to make more memories with my friend.
Nice writing! I fixed some mistakes and made a few small changes for clarity. I hope you have a happy birthday and enjoy Disneyland!
2025년 12월 3일
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