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My family and I went to the local park for a picnic. Initially, we sat in an area we thought would be suitable. However, we soon realized that this area was filled with unpleasant-smelling trash. The acrid odor became increasingly unbearable, prompting us to find a different spot. After some searching, we finally discovered a clean area untouched by litter. We were delighted and quickly relocated. It was a wise decision, and, of course, we made sure not to leave any trash behind.
2023년 11월 23일 오전 9:41
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My family and I went to the local park for a picnic. Initially, we sat in an area we thought would be suitable. However, we soon realized that this area was filled with unpleasant-smelling trash. The acrid odor became increasingly unbearable, prompting us to find a different spot. After some searching, we finally discovered a clean area untouched by litter. We were delighted and quickly relocated. It was a wise decision, and, of course, we made sure not to leave any trash behind.
Very good. It’s always annoying when people leave rubbish around. It’s so unnecessary.
2023년 11월 23일
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My family and I went to the local park for a picnic. Initially, we chose an area we thought would be suitable. However, we soon realized that it was filled with unpleasant-smelling trash. The acrid odor became increasingly unbearable, prompting us to find a different spot. After some searching, we discovered a clean area untouched by litter. We were delighted and quickly relocated. It was a wise decision, and we made sure not to leave any trash behind.
Your description of the picnic experience is vivid and engaging. You successfully conveyed the discomfort caused by the trash and the relief of finding a cleaner spot. This shows your ability to create a strong sense of place in your writing. To enhance your storytelling, consider adding more sensory details or emotions. This could make your writing even more immersive and relatable. Keep up the good work, and remember to explore different descriptive techniques to further enrich your stories.
2023년 11월 23일
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