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A family of four from Shanxi province traveled to Tianjin the other day. They walked along the Haihe river. Their little son accidentally fell into the river when playing with water . The father who can’t swim jumped into the river to save his son. The elder brother also jumped into the river to help. The mother was so anxious about, she intended to save his elder son. At this time the father saved the little boy. But he saw his wife and elder son were in dangerous. He begged passersby and onlookers to help. He hoped someone who can swim could save his wife and son. But no one did that . Do you think it is somehow indifferent of the people now.
2026년 8월 8일 오전 4:30
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A family of four from Shanxi Province travelled to Tianjin the other day. They were walking along the Haihe River when their young son accidentally fell into the river while playing near the water. The father, who could not swim, jumped into the river to save his son. The older brother also jumped into the river to help.
The mother was extremely anxious and intended to save her older son. At that moment, the father managed to save the younger boy, but he saw that his wife and older son were also in danger. He called out to passers-by and onlookers for help, hoping that someone who could swim would rescue his wife and son. However, no one came to help.
Do you think people have become indifferent to others nowadays?
Level: C1.
Your writing tells a dramatic story clearly and keeps the reader engaged. You use a good range of vocabulary and successfully describe a complicated sequence of events. Most of the corrections involved verb tenses, pronouns, prepositions, and more natural expressions. The final question also needed a small change to sound natural in English. Excellent work! 😊
2026년 8월 8일 오전 10:13
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