I went to Tokyo university's festival to see my frlend's dance. She danced a lot of genres like hiphop, house and lock. It was so cool. After that, we went to Saizeriya and talked a lot.

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2025년 5월 24일 오전 8:57

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I went to Tokyo university's festival to watch my friend dance. She danced a lot of genres like hiphop, house and lock. It was so cool. After that, we went to Saizeriya and talked a lot.

Overall it's very good. I changed "to see my friend's dance" to "to watch my friend dance" because you mentioned that your friend danced multiple dances, not just one. "My friend's dance" implies that they have 1 very specific dance to show you, not multiple. Does that make sense?

2025년 5월 24일 오후 6:43