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This week was full of special moments and also a lot of hard work. The most memorable day was celebrating the six-month anniversary with my girlfriend in Tokyo. We spent the day walking around the city together, talking, and enjoying the atmosphere. It felt great to look back on the time we have spent together and to feel how close we have become. I realized again how important she is to me. Another nice moment this week was when we went to Nitori to look at furniture. We weren’t buying anything yet, but we walked around and imagined our future room together. It was fun to think about what kind of life we want to build. Even small things like choosing a sofa or a table made me really happy, because I could picture our future more clearly. We also made hot pot together at home. It was simple, but it felt warm and relaxing. Cooking and eating together made me feel comfortable and peaceful. I like those quiet moments where we don’t need anything special to feel happy. On the other hand, I worked five days at my part-time job, and it was very tiring. Every day felt long and I was exhausted, but thinking about my girlfriend gave me strength. I’m proud that I didn’t give up and I finished the week well. Overall, it was a good week filled with love and effort.
2025년 12월 5일 오후 4:10
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This week was full of special moments and also a lot of hard work. The most memorable day was celebrating my six-month anniversary with my girlfriend in Tokyo. We spent the day walking around the city together, talking, and enjoying the atmosphere. It felt great to look back on the time we have spent together and to feel how close we have become. I realized again how important she is to me. Another nice moment this week was when we went to Nitori to look at furniture. We weren’t buying anything yet, but we walked around and imagined our future home together. It was fun to think about what kind of life we want to build. Even small things like choosing a sofa or a table made me really happy, because I could picture our future more clearly. We also made hot pot together at home. It was simple, but it felt warm and relaxing. Cooking and eating together made me feel comfortable and at peace. I like those quiet moments where we don’t need anything special to feel happy. Also this week, I worked five days at my part-time job, and it was very tiring. Every day felt long and I was exhausted, but thinking about my girlfriend gave me strength. I’m proud that I didn’t give up and I finished the week well. Overall, it was a good week filled with love and effort.
Excellent writing! It has a natural flow and I'm really impressed! "On the other hand" is used when you are presenting an argument, so it doesn't really work here. You might use "also this week" or "in the same week" as a transition.
2025년 12월 5일
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