Extreme weather is occurring more and more frequently. First of all, we should respond to it positively mentally and ideologically. Secondly, we should take practical actions to do our best to make a difference. When extreme weather strikes again, we should try our best to avoid being harmed, and meanwhile do something meaningful.
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Extreme weather is occurring more and more frequently. First of all, we should respond to it positively, both mentally and emotionally. Secondly, we should take practical action and do our best to make a difference. When extreme weather strikes again, we should do our best to avoid being harmed while also trying to do something meaningful.
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Your writing is clear and well organised, and you express your ideas in a logical sequence. You also use useful expressions such as "take practical action" and "make a difference". The main improvements were related to natural collocations and making the final sentence flow more smoothly. 😊
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