A butterfly flew into a monkey’s enclosure . It try to escape from the enclosure . The monkey saw and catch it. Then the monkey release it. Maybe at that time the monkey thought he can’t get the freedom but the butterfly could. Animals have spirituality.
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A butterfly flew into a monkey’s enclosure. It tried to escape, but the monkey saw it and caught it. Then the monkey released it. Maybe at that moment, the monkey thought that it couldn’t escape from its enclosure, but the butterfly could. Animals have a spirituality of their own.
Level: B2/C1.
Your writing tells the story clearly and ends with an interesting philosophical idea. You use the sequence of events well. The main corrections involved past-tense verbs, pronouns, and more natural expressions. The final sentence was also adjusted to make your idea sound more natural in English. 😊
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A butterfly flew into a monkey’s enclosure . It tried to escape from the enclosure . The monkey saw and caugth it. Then the monkey released it. Maybe at that time the monkey thought he couldn’t get the freedom but the butterfly could. Animals have spirituality.
Hen hao, very good.
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A butterfly flew into a monkey’s enclosure. It tried to escape from the enclosure. The monkey saw it and caught it. Then the monkey released it. Maybe at that time the monkey thought he couldn’t get free, but the butterfly could. Animals have spirituality, or Animals are spiritual.
Good try! Remember to use past tense for the whole story, since it already happened.
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