Sarah, an actress retired last year. She was popular as an actress. Now she works as a writer. She wrote some books after her retirement. She is getting more popular as a writer after retirement.

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2024년 6월 13일 오전 10:40

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Sarah, an actress retired last year. She was popular as an actress, and now works as a writer. She wrote some books after her retirement, and is becoming popular in that sphere.

You were correct to keep your sentences short. However, your writing was very stilted and unnatural. I changed it to make it flow a bit better

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