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Taku Kobayashi
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【TOPIC】
Today,more and more companies offer to work from home.Do you think this is good idea?
【My opinions】
Yes,I think it is a good idea that more and more companies offer to work from home.
I have two reasons.
First of all,workers can reduce time commuting to the office,
Some workers have to spend a long time to go to their company.
If the workers can work at home,they can save the time.
Second,workers can spend a hobby and their families.
It is a good things for them to reduce stress from work.
For the reasons that I mentioned working at home is good idea.
2024년 1월 14일 오전 5:09
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I am practicing English writing.
Could you check it out?
【TOPIC】
Today, more and more companies offer the option/opportunity to work from home. Do you think this is a good idea?
【My opinion】
Yes,I think it is a good idea that more and more companies offer to work from home.
I have two reasons.
First of all, workers can reduce time spent commuting to the office.
Some workers have to spend a long time getting to their office/workplace.
If the workers could work at home, they could save the time. (i don't think this sentence was incorrect, but COULD is probably better for the conditional)
Secondly, workers could spend time on a hobby and time with their families.
It would be a good thing for them to reduce stress from work.
For the reasons that I mentioned working at home is good idea.
If the companies offer to work from home, that means the companies themselves would work from home, which makes no sense. You can usually just say OPINION singular, even if it contains several ideas. nice job.
2024년 1월 14일
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I am practicing English writing. Could you check it out? 【TOPIC】 Today,more and
more companies offer to work at home.Do you think this is a good idea? 【My
opinions】 Yes,I think it is a good idea that more and more companies offer to
work at home. I have two reasons. First of all,workers can reduce time
commuting to the office, Some workers have to spend a long time to go to their
companies. If the workers can work at home,they can save time. Second,workers
can take up a hobby with their family. It is a good thing for them to reduce
stress from work. For the reasons that I mentioned,working at home is a good idea.
2024년 1월 14일
1
I am practicing English writing. Could you check it out? 【TOPIC】 Today,more and
more companies offer to work from home.Do you think this is a good idea? 【My
opinions】 Yes,I think it is a good idea that more and more companies offer to
work from home. I have two reasons. First of all,workers can reduce time
commuting to the office, Some workers have to spend a long time going/getting to their
company. If the workers can work at their home,they can save the time. Second,workers
can spend a hobby and their families. It is a good things for them to reduce
stress from work. For the reasons that I mentioned working at home is good idea.
2024년 1월 14일
I am practicing English writing.
Could you check it out?
You have had good corrections so far so I won't had mine they will not be too different than the current corrections. BUT BEWARE you need to watch you use of the word to....The phrase 'companies offer to work from home ' is not appropriate for the context the best word to use is as already suggested 'the option to work from home' or 'the option for employees to work at home'
2024년 1월 14일
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