Day 5.
Today I finally finished reading a Mario Puzo’s book “The Family”. It is the story about Pope Alexander VI and his son Cesare Borgia. This is my favorite author, his books are very interesting and easy to read. I also have his book named Omerta. I have it in English and in Russian so I would read it in my native language at first and then in English without dictionary. But it comes not now, I should improve my knowledge in other areas like knowing more about the history of Russia, St Petersburg and Romanov dynasty.
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Day 5.
Today, I finally finished reading Mario Puzo’s book, The Family. He is my favorite author, as his books are very interesting and easy to read. That particular book is about Pope Alexander VI, and his son, Cesare Borgia.*
I also have another book written by him titled, Omerta. I have it both in English and in Russian, so I often read it in my native language, first, and then, in English, and hopefully, without too much help from a dictionary! However, finishing that one will need to happen later.
Right now, I should improve my knowledge in other areas like knowing more about the history of Russia, St. Petersburg, and the Romanov dynasty.
Hi, Pavel. Good job! The changes that I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to clarify your thoughts, and for ease of reading. Sincerest apologies if I have misinterpreted. I hope that this helps you. J.
*In your original text, to start the third sentence, you use the word, He. The antecedent of that pronoun is Mario Puzo, from the first sentence. However, you then separated it by the second sentence mentioning Pope Alexander VI, and his son, Cesare Borgia, which is a bit confusing to the reader since it takes a moment to figure out exactly to which “He” is the subject of that third sentence. Mario? Pope Alexander? His son? If it had been Maria, and you had written, “She is my…,” then there is not that much of an issue, but regardless, to avoid confusion, even if only momentary, which detracts from the enjoyment of reading, it is best to keep your pronoun next to its antecedent.
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