다양한 영어 선생님을 검색해 보세요...
Brazil flagRenan
Country's customs I wrote this as homework, my teacher said it could improve but didn't say how to, can you help? All countries have their own group of specific unwritten rules that every local fallows without even knowing about it. In the UK, mainly in London, is very common to talk about the weather on regular conversations but in the USA it could be seen as a small talk topic. One’s perception of reality and its interaction with other individuals may be interpreted as a local culture, or you could say “culture” instead. The country’s culture is something very powerful as it influences the relationship between friends, business acquaintance and even moral standards. Northern hemisphere countries, for instance, have been very close to democracy since before the 18th and today their people have a strong feeling about what is privacy and freedom. In the other hand, countries that have flirted with dictatorship in the last 200 years usually don’t care as much as their upper hemisphere counterpart. You see the former have trouble putting their personal data in the hands of people they don’t fully trust, since that gives power to those unknow forces, but the latter have do not see that as a big issue, thus they accept technological changes more easily. That explains why we see so many digital banks rising in Latin America regard many European cities majorly use local bills. It is very interesting to study how a society works by analysing how its culture have been changing and then, by understanding different realities, we may be able to make our own a little bit better.

교정 · 2

1
Country's customs

I wrote this as homework, my teacher said it could improve but didn't say how to, can you help?

All countries have their own group of specific unwritten rules that every local follows without even knowing about it. In the UK, mainly in London, it is very common to talk about the weather in regular conversations but in the USA it could be seen as a small talk topic. One’s perception of reality and its their interactions with other individuals may be interpreted as a local culture, or you could say “culture” instead. I don't think you need this part - it just repeats what you've already said.
The country’s culture is something very powerful as it influences the relationships between friends, business acquaintances and even moral standards. Northern hemisphere countries This isn't wrong, but it would sound better if you said "Countries in the northern hemisphere", for instance, have been very close to democracy since before the 18th century and today their people have a strong feeling about what is privacy and freedom. On the other hand, countries that have flirted with dictatorship in the last 200 years usually don’t care as much as their upper hemisphere counterparts. You see the former have trouble putting their personal data in the hands of people they don’t fully trust, since that gives power to those unknown forces, but the latter have do not see that as a big issue. Thus, they accept technological changes more easily. That explains why we see so many digital banks rising in Latin America regard while many European cities majorly use local bills.
It is very interesting to study how a society works by analyzing how its culture has been changing. Then, by understanding different realities, we may be able to make our own a little bit better.

Corrections
Suggestions

더 빨리 진행하고 싶나요?

이 학습 커뮤니티에 참여하고 무료로 연습해보세요!

집에서 편안하게 언어를 배울 수 있는 기회를 놓치지 마세요. 경험 많은 강사진을 살펴보고 지금 바로 첫 수업을 신청하세요!

오늘 학습 시작하기