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The advantage and disadvantage of WeChat(Please heip me to find mistakes and inappropriate places )
Obviously,WeChat has some advantages and disadvantages.
As for advantages,firstly,it's cheaper than making a call so that people can communicate with each other more confidently.Secondly,it caters to most of people and has lots of functions to satisfy people.Finally,it's confident anywhere at any time.
As for disadvantages,first,it may disclose identity information to cause security problems.What's more,this confident communication tool possibly reduce face-to-face communication.Last but not least,it's a distractin from study tostudents.Therefore,we should use it properly.
2019년 10월 3일 오후 1:49
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The advantage and disadvantage of WeChat (Please heip me to find mistakes and inappropriate places )
Obviously, WeChat has some advantages and disadvantages.
As for advantages, firstly, it's cheaper than making a call so that people can communicate with each other more confidently. Secondly, it caters to most people and has lots of functions to satisfy people. Finally, it's confident anywhere at any time.
As for disadvantages, first, it may disclose identity information to cause security problems. What's more, this confident communication tool possibly reduce face-to-face communication. Last but not least, it's a distraction from study to students. Therefore,we should use it properly.
I see a few misspelling, but also you want a space after punctuation marks. Great job!
2019년 10월 3일
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