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An essay My English teacher suggests me to write an essay about if it's better to have a small or a large age difference between siblings, this is the essay: Is it better to have a small or a large age difference between siblings? The last English class we discussed if it's better to have a small or a large difference between siblings. In this essay, I would clarify the advantages and disadvantages of each of them in different topics like competition and friendship between them. The first thing that we should think is how our children grow up. If there is a large age difference between them we could observe that the older children usually help their younger sibling and the younger sibling learn easier differents thinks of their life because they have a close referent, that reason produce that the younger siblings do fewer mistakes than the older siblings. We can not forget for learning we need to do mistakes and then correct them. On the other hand, if there is a small age difference between siblings they are more competitive and they can improve their aptitudes slower than if there is a large age difference between them but with stronger bases. Another thing we have to keep on mind is their friendship. If they play games together, if they learn of their own mistakes, they go to the same school, they will usually be more close bond between them. However, the opposite may happen, let get worse between them and they'll have a bad relationship with them the rest of their lives. Finally, it is important to remember each family it's unique and the children are unique too. we can advise but every family situation is different and they are the ones who have to fight to grow happy and united.
2019년 11월 17일 오후 9:02
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An essay

My English teacher suggests <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">me to write</s> ('to me to write' OR 'that I write') an essay about if it's better to have a small or a large age difference between siblings, this is the essay:

Is it better to have a small or a large age difference between siblings?

The last English class we discussed if (could use 'whether' instead) it's better to have a small or a large difference between siblings. In this essay, I <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">would</s> ('will') clarify the advantages and disadvantages of <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">each of them</s> ('different age differences') in different topics like competition and friendship between <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">them</s> ('siblings').

The first thing that we should think is how our children grow up. If there is a large age difference between them we could observe that the older children usually help their younger sibling, and the younger sibling <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">learn</s> ('learns') <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">easier</s> ('more easily') <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">differents</s> ('different') <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">thinks</s> ('aspects') of their life because they have a close <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">referent</s> ('companion' OR 'model' ?), <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">that reason produce</s> ('because of' OR 'for that reason we see') that the younger siblings <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">do</s> ('make') fewer mistakes than the older siblings. We can not forget for learning we need to <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">do</s> ('make') mistakes and then correct them. On the other hand, if there is a small age difference between siblings they are more competitive and they can improve their aptitudes <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">slower</s> ('more slowly') than if there is a large age difference between them but with stronger bases.

Another thing we have to keep <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">on</s> ('in') mind is their friendship. If they play games together, if they learn of their own mistakes, they go to the same school, <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">they will usually be more close bond between them </s>('there will usually be a closer bond between them' OR 'they will usually have a closer bond between them'). However, the opposite may happen, let things get worse between them and they'll have a bad relationship with them the rest of their lives.

Finally, it is important to remember each family <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">it's</s> ('is') unique and the children are unique too. we can <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">advise</s> ('make suggestions'), but every family situation is different <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">and</s> they are the ones who have to fight to grow happy and united.

Molt bé! Si tens cap pregunta de les correccions, estaria content de parlar-ne!
2019년 12월 14일
Hi Estelle, I have a brother 4 years smaller than me and I had another one 2 years older than me but he died when he was a few months and I never met him. My brother and I are really close friendship. And you? Do you have any siblings?
2019년 11월 17일
Hi Marius. This is an interesting topic. Do you have any siblings?
2019년 11월 17일
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