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I think that if someone wants to ahead in success, there is the most important quality the person who should have, which is self-discipline. If you don't follow the schedule, you might waste a lot of time on unnecessary things; furthermore, the works which should accomplish today will be delayed.

<div>Please check my sentences</div><div><br></div><div>I think <span style="background-color: rgb(255, 235, 204); color: rgb(0, 138, 0);">(</span>that<span style="background-color: rgb(255, 235, 204); color: rgb(0, 138, 0);">)</span> if someone wants to <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">ahead in success</s><span style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);"> </span><span style="color: rgb(0, 138, 0); background-color: rgb(255, 235, 204);">succeed(/be successful)</span>, <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">there is</s> the most important quality <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">the</s> <span style="color: rgb(0, 138, 0); background-color: rgb(255, 235, 204);">a</span><span style="color: rgb(0, 138, 0);"> </span>person <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">who</s> should have<s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">, which</s> is self-discipline. If you don't follow <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">the</s> <span style="color: rgb(0, 138, 0); background-color: rgb(255, 235, 204);">a</span><span style="color: rgb(0, 138, 0);"> </span><span style="color: rgb(0, 138, 0); background-color: rgb(255, 235, 204);">(regular)</span><span style="color: rgb(0, 138, 0);"> </span>schedule, you might waste a lot of time on unnecessary<span style="background-color: rgb(255, 235, 204); color: rgb(0, 138, 0);">/unessential</span> things<s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">;</s><span style="color: rgb(0, 138, 0); background-color: rgb(255, 235, 204);">.</span> <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">furthermore</s><span style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);"> </span><span style="color: rgb(0, 138, 0); background-color: rgb(255, 235, 204);">Furthermore</span>, the works which should <span style="background-color: rgb(255, 235, 204); color: rgb(0, 138, 0);">be</span><span style="color: rgb(0, 138, 0);"> </span>accomplish<span style="background-color: rgb(255, 235, 204); color: rgb(0, 138, 0);">ed</span> today will be delayed.</div>

<div>Please check my sentences</div><div><br></div><div>I think that if someone wants to ahead in success, there is the most important quality the person who should have, which is self-discipline. If you don't follow the schedule, you might waste a lot of time on unnecessary things; furthermore, the works which should accomplish today will be delayed.</div><div><br></div><div>-------------</div><div><strong><em>Below is how I would write it.</em></strong></div><div><br></div><div><strong><em>I think that if someone wants to succeed, the most important quality a person should have is self-discipline. If you don't follow a schedule, you might waste a lot of time on unnecessary things. Furthermore, works that should be accomplished today will be delayed.</em></strong></div>

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