At the stadium with my son
Yesterday I went to the stadium with my elder son to see a soccer match of the local team.
I am not a supporter of the local team, but I love soccer. I really am a big supporter of another team and my son is not fond of soccer. He loves cars and motorbike. My son had made arrangements with his school friends to go to see the match, so we went together to the stadium.
The atmosphere was beautiful and my son enjoied very match with his schoolmates. I could see a match between two team that played in the first league.
Our local team missed the match three to nil with two players ejected. Anyway it was a beautiful day and I spent a gorgeous afternoon with my son.
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At the stadium with my son
Yesterday, I went to the stadium with my oldest son to watch our local soccer team play.
I am not a supporter/big fan of the local team, but I love soccer. I really am a big supporter of another team and my son is not fond of soccer. He loves cars and motorbikes. My son had made arrangements with his schoolmates to go to see the match, so we went together to the stadium together.
The weather was beautiful and my son really enjoyed very match spending time with his schoolmates. I was able to watch a match between the two teams that played in the first league.
Our local team lost the match three to nil with two players ejected. Anyway, it was a beautiful day and I spent a gorgeous afternoon with my son.
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At the stadium with my son
Yesterday I went to the stadium with my eldest son to see a soccer match of the local team.
I am not a supporter of the local team, but I love soccer. I really am a big supporter of another team and my son is not fond of soccer. He loves cars and motorbikes. My son had made arrangements with his school friends to go to see the match, so we went together to the stadium.
The atmosphere was beautiful and my son enjoyed it very match with his schoolmates. I could see a match between two team that played in the first league.
Our local team missed the match three to nil with two players ejected. Anyway it was a beautiful day and I spent a gorgeous afternoon with my son.
Thank for correcting my work
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At the stadium with my son
Yesterday I went to the stadium with my elder son to see a soccer match of the local team.
[We would not say “soccer match of the local team”; instead, we would say: “…see a soccer match between local teams” or “…see a local team in a soccer match”].
I am not a supporter of the local team, but I love soccer.
[For sports, we use the word “fan” to show allegiance. “I am not a fan of the local team…”].
I really am a big supporter of another team and my son is not fond of soccer. He loves cars and motorbike.
[Here insert “big fan of” for “supporter”. Also, we pluralize things we like: I like cookies, I like colors, I like cars, I like motorbikes.]
My son had made arrangements with his school friends to go to see the match, so we went together to the stadium.
[Great sentence!]
The atmosphere was beautiful and my son enjoied very match with his schoolmates.
[Was the atmosphere beautiful or lively? Try to think of a different adjective. People’s faces are beautiful, wedding dresses and artwork can be beautiful, a sunset with lots of colors can be beautiful. A good soccer match is perhaps “exciting” or “lively”. Spelling: enjoyed. Also: the “very” is not placed correctly in the sentence. Where should it go?].
I could see a match between two team that played in the first league.
[Pluralize “team”: “….a match between two teams…”].
Our local team missed the match three to nil with two players ejected. Anyway it was a beautiful day and I spent a gorgeous afternoon with my son.
[Let’s use “to lose” here: “Our local team lost…”. Also, we don’t “eject” players from a sports team, they are usually “suspended”. Instead of “anyway”, use “Even still”…].
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