An ideal house
Could you help me correct my mistakes？thanks！
I want to live in a big house in the center of big city. There are plenty of sunshine. I can go to the supermarket, restaurant and places of entertainment whenever I want. It is very convenient for my life. In the house, I would like to set one big room for watching movies and one big room for family band. In my spare time I can enjoy the movie as if I were in a movie theater. And I think music is an important thing for my family because it can make us happy and relaxed. There are a big swimming pool and broad courtyard outside the house. There is a saying that “Life lies in movement”. We can have a good time there.
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An ideal house
Could you help me correct my mistakes？thanks！
I want to live in a big house in the center of a big city where there is are plenty of sunshine. I can could go to the supermarket, restaurant, and places of entertainment whenever I want. It is would be very convenient for me. my life.
In the house, I would like to set aside one big room for watching movies and one big room for our family band. In my spare time I can could enjoy the movies as if I were in a movie theater. And I think music is an important thing for my family because it can makes us happy and relaxed. There are I would also build a big swimming pool and a broad courtyard outside the house.
There is a saying that “Life lies in movement”. We can could have a good time there.
I changed many of your verbs so that the verb tense is consistent throughout the paragraph.
I crossed out "And" because in general, you should not start a sentence with "And." You will sometimes see it in books or magazines, but only when they are using it for emphasis.
If you have any questions about my corrections, please ask. I hope you build your dream house someday!
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