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My favorite country I like to go on vacation to Montenegro. I have been there 4 times and I'd like to go there more and more. What is the reason for this? First, the country has a very beautiful nature. Picturesque mountain peaks on which the snow never melts; breathtaking mountain passes; the cleanest lakes and rivers from which you can drink. And of course the sea. The beauty of Adriatic coast is impossible to describe. It must be seen! Secondly, there is a pleasant climate. It’s not hot over there. Even in the summer when the sun is strong you can go to the mountains and enjoy the fresh air and the cool breeze. Thirdly, that’s the kindness of the local people. They are kind calm and helpful. Their hospitality is known throughout the world. That's why I want to go to Montenegro more and more. If you like traveling, but have not yet been to Montenegro, I highly recommend you to do it.
2020년 5월 29일 오전 3:59
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My favorite country

I would like to go on vacation to Montenegro. I have been there 4 times already and I'd like to go there more and more. What is the reason for this?
First, the country has a very beautiful nature. Picturesque mountain peaks on which the snow never melts; breathtaking mountain passes; the cleanest lakes and rivers from which you can drink, and of course the sea. The beauty of Adriatic coast is impossible to describe. It must be seen!
Secondly, there is a pleasant climate. It’s not hot over there, even in the summer when the sun is strong you can go to the mountains and enjoy the fresh air and the cool breeze.
Thirdly, <s>that’s</s> it's the kindness of the local people. They are kind, calm, and helpful. Their hospitality is known throughout the world.
That's why I want to go to Montenegro more and more. If you like traveling<s>,</s> but have not yet been to Montenegro, I highly recommend you to do<s> it</s>.

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I suggest using
"Thirdly, it's the <s>kindness</s> manner of the local people. They are kind, calm, and helpful."

If you avoid repeating describing words such as "kind" it makes it more interesting to read


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