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An exercise Article for B2 Cambridge exam Could you please correct this article that I wrote to practice for my B2 future exam? Trip’s idea We are living in a strange period, our life are changed by the coronavirus lockdown. In the other way, the lockdown have rappresented an important opportunity to reflect about our lifestyle routine. Before lockdown people were busy about work, study, it was difficult to find the time to think about in which direction their life were going. One of the most negative effect of social distancing is the impossibility to stay in open space in contact with the nature. How many times have we renounced to make a walk because we were too busy or too tired about our lifestyle routine? In my opinion it succeded many times, but now people have understood the importance of small things like a walk in a beautiful park. The power of nature is the immediate positive effect that it have in our mind and body. So, one interesting idea to spent a day in total relax is to visit Valle del Lambro Regional park in Italy. The Valle del Lambro Regional Park is a protected natural area of Lombardy established in 1983. It is managed by a consortium of 36 municipalities in the provinces of Como, Lecco and Monza and Brianza. The park includes a territory which estends from north to south for 25 km in which there are two important lakes: Lake of Alserio and Lake of Pusiano. In this park is possibile to see a different kind of plant life and fauna. It is a good opportunity for parents to bring their children to spend a different day. Children could see many animals, at the same time their family could sensitize them to the respect of nature. Being in nature allows us to nourish and manifest what we are and respect what we are allows us to respect what surrounds us.

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An exercise Article for B2 Cambridge exam

Could you please correct this article that I wrote to practice for my B2 future exam?

Trip’s idea

We are living in a strange period. Our lifeves are/have been changed by the coronavirus lockdown.
In the other way(I would change this to 'in a way' - you can say 'on the other hand' but only if you've already described one point, which you haven't really done yet), the lockdown haves represented an important opportunity to reflect abouton our lifestyles and routines.
Before lockdown people were busy aboutwith work, study...it was difficult to find the time to think about in which direction their lifves were going in.
One of the most negative effects of social distancing is the impossibility(better wording: 'not being able to/allowed to') to stay in open space in contact with the nature.
How many times have we renounced(not sure about the meaning here - 'decided not to'? or 'not bothered to'?) to maketake/go for a walk because we were too busy or too tired aboutbecause of/due to our lifestyle or routine? In my opinion it succeeded many times, but now people have understood the importance of small things like a walk in a beautiful park.
The power of nature is the immediate positive effect that it haves inon our mind and body.
So, one interesting idea to spentd a day in total relaxation is to visit Valle del Lambro Regional park in Italy.
The Valle del Lambro Regional Park is a protected natural area of Lombardy established in 1983. It is managed by a consortium of 36 municipalities in the provinces of Como, Lecco and Monza and Brianza.
The park includes a territory which esxtends from north to south for 25 km(more natural: extends 25km from north to south) in which there are two important lakes: Lake of Alserio and Lake of Pusiano.
In this park it is possible to see a different kinds of plant life and fauna.
It is a good opportunity for parents to bring their children to spend a different day(more natural: to spend their day a little differently/to experience a different kind of day). Children could see many animals and at the same time their family could sensitize* them to the respect of nature.(better: their family could teach them the importance of respecting nature/their family could instil in them a respect for nature)
Being in nature allows us to nourish and manifest what we are and respect what we are. It allows us to respect what surrounds us.


(*I'm not sure how the Cambridge English exams work - I don't know if they require you to use British spellings rather than US spellings, but just in case, this is the US spelling and it would be 'sensitise' in British English)


Good luck with your exam! :)



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An exercise Article for B2 Cambridge exam

Could you please correct this article that I wrote to practice my B2 exam?

An Idea for a Trip

We are living in a strange period, our lives are changed by the coronavirus lockdown.
In another way, the lockdown represents an important opportunity to reflect on our daily routine.
Before lockdown we were busy working, studying, and it was difficult to find time to think about where our lives were heading.
One of the greatest harms of social distancing is the impossibility to stay in the open in contact with nature.
How many times have we denied ourselves a walk because we were too busy or too tired about our lifestyle routine? Many times in my opinion, but now we understand the importance of small things like a walk in a beautiful park.
The power of nature is its immediate good to our mind and body.
So, one interesting idea is to spend a day in total relaxation and visit the Valle del Lambro Regional park in Italy.
The Valle del Lambro Regional Park is a protected natural area of Lombardy established in 1983. It is managed by a consortium of 36 municipalities in the provinces of Como, Lecco and Monza and Brianza.
The park includes territory which extends from north to south for 25 km and houses two important lakes: Lake of Alserio and Lake of Pusiano.
In this park it is possibile to see different kinds of flora and fauna.
It is a good opportunity for parents to bring their children to spend a different day. Children can see many animals, and at the same time their family can sensitize them to respect nature.
Being in nature allows us to nourish and manifest what we are and respecting what we are allows us to respect what surrounds us.

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