Fishing without a Rod
Have you ever gone fishing without a rod? To reply to this question, I bet you will think of a net. When this idea comes to me, I don't think of a net. Instead, there's a little narrow-necked bottle glittering in my mind.
When I was young, I lived in a small village, where a small river flowed by still. It was my paradise, so was to my fellows.
As a child, I didn't have pocket money to buy a rod and a few fishhooks. But we, a crowd of about ten-year-old kids never bothered a rod to catch fish. No one could remember who was the first invented this great way to fish just as we didn't know who ever developed and taught us those interesting games we played every day.
It didn't take any time to learn how to fish with a bottle. First, you just needed to get a discarded or unused plastic or glass bottle with a narrow neck. It was easy to find one in your kitchen. A sauce container or a sugar jar was good enough as long as it was transparent. Remove all labels and clean it up to make sure it smelt nothing so that fish wouldn't notice it was a trap.
How big it was depended on how big the fish you expected to catch were. To a kid, he paid no attention to what kind and size of the fish he could get, the only thing he cared about was to play with those fellows together, laughing and splashing by the river.
We also never took care of how to get and which kind of lures we would use. Digging worms underground, seizing green larvae on leaves, searching for grasshoppers in grass or picking a piece of steamed bread from the kitchen was an available and joyful way for our kids.
To your surprise, a good fishing spot was not a place where fish gathered, the shade of trees or under a stone bridge was a better choice for us. Fish always found food even they were in a child's trap, a simple bottle.
Wading into the water, not far from the bank, lay the bottle down on the riverbed and the bottle mouth toward the bank, then put food inside, near the neck of the bottle. This way it was attractive enough for an inexperienced and greedy fish. At last you only need to sit down still, waiting fish to go in. Being patient was always necessary.
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Fishing without a Rod
Have you ever gone fishing without a rod? To reply to this question, I bet you will think of a net. When this idea comes to me, I don't think of a net. Instead, there's a little, narrow-necked bottle glitters in my mind.
When I was young, I lived in a small village, where a small river flowed by still. It was my paradise, so as it was to my fellows playmates.
As a child, I didn't have pocket money to buy spend on a rod and a few fishhooks. But we, a crowd of about ten-year-old kids, never bothered to use a fishing rods to catch fish. No one could remember who was the first to invented this great way to fish, just as we didn't know who ever developed and taught us those interesting games we played every day.
It didn't take any time to learn how to fish with a bottle. First, you just needed to get a discarded or unused plastic or glass bottle with a narrow neck. It was easy to find one in your kitchen. A sauce container or a sugar jar was good enough as long as it was transparent. Remove all labels and clean it up to make sure it smelt of nothing so that fish wouldn't notice it was a trap.
How big it was depended on how big the fish you expected to catch were. To a kid, he paid no attention to what the kind and size of the fish he could get didn't matter; the only thing he cared about was to playing together with those fellows together, laughing and splashing by the river.
We also never took care of cared much about how to get and which kind of lures we would use. Digging in the ground for worms underground, seizing green larvae on leaves, searching for grasshoppers in grass or picking a piece of steamed bread from the kitchen was were all an available and joyful way options for our us kids.
Wading into the water, not far from the bank, I would lay the bottle down on the riverbed and with the bottle mouth toward the bank, then put food inside, near the neck of the bottle. This way it was attractive enough for an inexperienced and greedy fish. At last you I only needed to sit down and be still, waiting to wait for the fish to go in. Being patient was always necessary.
Comments
Because the writing is high level, I edited this as if it were written by a native speaker. Therefore, many of the changes are stylistic. (Your grammar and vocabulary were correct but I tried to improve style.) For example:
buy --> spend on
"Buy" is not wrong. But "buy" emphasizes the thing you buy; "spend on" emphasizes the amount of money or lack of money. This is a stylistic change only.
Some of the changes are necessary. For example:
our kids --> us kids
In the essay, you write about you and your friends. "Our kids" refers to "the sons and daughters of me and my friends." I don't think that's what you want here. I think because 我们 can mean "we," "us," and "our" in Chinese depending on the context, it may cause confusion in English. In the phrase "...for us kids," the word "kids" is optional and emphasizes/clarifies "us." "Us" is an object pronoun and is the object of the preposition "for" (for whom? for them? for me?) In the phrase "for our kids," nothing is optional. "Our" is a possessive pronoun that shows possession of "kids" (whose kids? his kids? your kids?) You could just write "...for us" to be technically correct but I think "us kids" matches the tone and style.
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