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The gift of music in our life I try to rewrite and simplify the two first paragraphs of Awake! Magazine, August 2011 edition into the one below. If you find mistake and kindly want to correct it or make it better in your own style, please do so. Without music, what would life be? As for me, it would be dull and unappealing. For it reflects human's emotions, it could rejoices and inspires us. It could uplifts or reduces us to tears. Surely, music has power to influence our heart. Why so? James 1:17 "Music is a beautiful gift from God".

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Hi aldila!

I try tried to rewrite and simplify the two first first two paragraphs of "Awake!" Magazine's August 2011 edition issue into the one and posted it below. If you find any mistakes and kindly want to correct it or make it better in your own style, please do so. 


Without music, what would life be? As for me, it would be dull and unappealing. For it reflects human's emotions and it could rejoices make us rejoice and inspires us. It could uplifts or reduces us to tears. Surely, music has the power to influence our heart. Why is this so? James 1:17 "Music is a beautiful gift from God".

 

Awesome job!

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The gift of music in our life

I try to rewrite and simplify the two first paragraphs of "Awake!" Magazine, August 2011 edition into the one below. If you find any mistakes and kindly want to correct it or make it better in your own style, please do so.

Without music, what would life be? As for me, it would be dull and unappealing, for it reflects human's emotions and it could rejoices and inspires us. It could can uplifts or reduces us to tears. Surely, music has power to influence our heart. Why so? James 1:17: "Music is a beautiful gift from God".

[Good work.  When you use 'could' or other modal verbs, the 2nd verb is its infinitive form.]

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Music is like a poem to life. I can not live without music. Music is part of my life, when I'm sad or very happy, music is my friend, wherever I'm.
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Music plays an important part in our life. Different kinds of music bring us different feelings. Some make us feel happy. Some make us feel sad or excited etc. It both reflects our life and participate in it. Without it, life is like a journey through desert. :) I love music! :)
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I have read that Ancient Chinese history expounds that music will create a specific kind of society because it is or is not in tune with the Universal Order of Life.I also heard about its affection on our Chakras.Music has a definite impact on the chakras. Music affects people and maybe it is really a gift .

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