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Could you correct mistakes,please) It was a perfect, sunny day at the festival and it felt like nothing could go wrong. It was still early when I and my friend Ann reached Notting Hill. We strolled through the streets and enjoyed the wonderful weather. But soon, thousands of people in beautiful costumes I noticed a cute boy and wanted to show him to Ann. I looked around but she was nowhere in sight. I started to panic and even worse it started to rain. I ran for the nearest roof across the crowd, fell and pulled the leg. And what do think? That cute boy helped me. Together we have found Ann and went in café. We had a fun time. I can say that it was the best day at the festival, but the leg still hurts.
2012년 2월 19일 오후 5:09
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Could you correct mistakes, please :)

It was a perfect, sunny day at the festival and it felt like nothing could go wrong. It was still early when Me and my friend Ann reached Notting Hill. We strolled through the streets and enjoyed the wonderful weather. But soon, there were thousands of people in beautiful costumes everywhere. I noticed a cute boy and wanted to show him to Ann. I looked around but she was nowhere in sight. I started to panic and even worse it started to rain. I ran for the nearest roof across the crowd but I fell and hit my legs. And what do you think? That cute boy helped me. Together we had found Ann and went in cafe. We had a fun time. I can say that it was the best day at the festival, but my legs still hurt.

 

I'd say

"I felt nothing could go wrong" or "it seemed nothig could go wrong" 

"we had (such) a great time" or "we had (so much) fun"

"best day of the festival" 

2012년 2월 19일
The main idea of ​​the story is the first sentence. You can not just correct mistakes, but also to make change in the history. Thanks in advance)
2012년 2월 19일

Could you correct mistakes,please)

It was a perfect, sunny day at the festival and it felt like nothing could go wrong. It was still early when  my friend Ann and I reached Notting Hill. We strolled through the streets and enjoyed the wonderful weather. But soon, thousands of people in beautiful costumes appeared, amongst them I noticed a cute boy and wanted to show him to Ann. I looked around, but she was nowhere in sight. I started to panic and even worse, it started to rain. I ran for the nearest roof, which was across the crowd, fell and hurt my leg. And what do you know? That cute boy helped me. Together we have found Ann and went into the café. We had a fun time. I can say that it was the best day at the festival, but my leg still hurts.

2012년 2월 19일
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