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Homework. Describing yourself. [i]This is my homework asked by my teacher Marco. If you are not Marco please do not read it or even do not try to correct it. Thanks in advance.[/i] Hello Alessandra, My name is Ivan. I am Russian. 32 years old. Single. I am working in software development company. I am fair-haired, and I wear glasses. I like short haircuts when hairs stick out to all the sides. My physique is lean. I think I am very shy. I find myself very hard to contact with unfamiliar people. I like to work hard, and rest-days become a kind of ordeal for me. I know that my story should contain exact four paragraphs by I do not know what else to write. Given the opportunity, I will prefer to describe something but not to write about myself. I think that is psychological. Sorry for that. Best regards, Ivan.
2012년 8월 28일 오후 8:57
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Homework. Describing yourself.

[i]This is my homework asked by my teacher Marco. If you are not Marco please do not read it or even do not try to correct it. Thanks in advance.[/i]

Hello Alessandra,

My name is Ivan. I am Russian,32 years old, single.
I work for a software development company.

I am fair-haired and I wear glasses.
I like short haircuts in which the hairs stick out from all sides.
My physique is lean.

I think I am very shy. I find it very hard to interact with
unfamiliar people.
I like to work hard and rest-days become a kind of ordeal for me.

I know that my story should contain exactly four paragraphs but I do not
know what else to write. Given the opportunity, I would prefer to describe
something rather than to write about myself. I think that is
psychological. Sorry for that.

Best regards,
Ivan.

 

(Very good Ivan !! In general your text is very good! I've made a few changes in it to improve your vocabulary. I haven't focused on grammar only. Marco)

2012년 8월 29일
"Alessandra" - Alexandra
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