Morrie
My Ideal School My ideal school starts at 9 a.m. and finishes at 3p.m. We have enough time to take part in after-school activities. My ideal school has a very big dining hall.There are different kinds of healthy and tasty food in it. There is a park on one side of the school and a museum on the other.The park is a good place to relax. There are only 30 students in each class.And each class must keep clean. The teachers are very kind to us.We only have an hour of homework every day.We don`t even have homework at weekends. There is a big swimming pool,a tennis court,a football field and a basketball court.We do sport every day.
2012년 10월 16일 오전 6:01
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My Ideal School

My ideal school starts I start school at 9 a.m. and finishes it at 3 p.m. We have enough time to take part in after-school activities.
My ideal school has a very big dining hall.There are different kinds of healthy and tasty foods in it. There is a park on one side of the school and a museum on the other. The park is a good place to relax.
There are only 30 students in each class. And and each class must keep has to be kept clean. The teachers are very kind to us.We, we only have an hour of homework every day. We don`t even have homework at on weekends.
There is a big swimming pool, a tennis court, a football field and a basketball court. We do sport play sports every day.

 

You need to make sure you hit the space bar after every punctuation mark. (e.g. "There is  big swimming pool, a tennis court, a football field and a basketball court" NOT "There is a big swimming pool,a tennis court,a football field and a basketball court.") only 30 people in your class?! That's a lot in US, I take an online class so it may be different, the normal amount of people in my class will usually be 12 or so. Keep it up! 加油!

2012년 10월 18일
thank you:)
2012년 10월 18일
I think you should use the Simple Future tense rather than the Present tense.
2012년 10월 17일
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