A paragraph about the "Advantage of Studying Abroad". Could you please correct my notes?

There are numerous advantages to studying abroad. Firstly, students who study in another country have a golden opportunity to gain various gratifying experiences. Since students are supposed to live far from their family, they should not only cope with multifaceted problems, but should also overcome difficult (insurmountable would mean that they could never solve them) obstacles they encounter without the assistance of their family. Secondly, living far from their family makes students mature, and considerate, because living alone takes them into a new world with lots of responsibilities and commitments. Finally, studying in a prestigious university overseas can pave a way to a better future lives for students, simply by expanding students' knowledge, and broadening their horizons. When students can gain several qualifications in such universities, it is easier for them to find a good job opportunities (plural because they are not all going for the same job).

A paragraph about the "Advantage of Studying Abroad". Could you please correct my notes?

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There are numerous advantages to studying abroad. Firstly, students who study in another territory have a golden opportunity to gain various gratifying experience. Since students are supposed to live far from their family, they should not only cope with multifaceted problems, but should also overcome insurmountable   obstacles they encounter without assistance of their family.

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[Perhaps you should not write "insurmountable"? It means one cannot solve the problem".  Thus, if they "surmount" the student has surmounted the insurmountable problem" which is an Oxymora, like referring to a "Married Bachelor" etc.]

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 Secondly, living far from their family makes students mature, [drop the comma, because you are using the conjunction,   "and" ] and considerate, because living alone takes them into a new world with lots of responsibilities and commitments.

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 Finally, studying in a prestigious university overseas can pave a way to a

[drop the  indefinite artical "a"  because   "lives" is plural, and we should not refer to   "a lives" but a  LIFE.']     better future lives for students simply by expanding students'    knowledge, and broaden their horizons. When students can gain several qualifications in such universities, it is easier for them to find a good job opportunity.

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   Very well written. Extremely well written I should say.  Terrific vocabulary, which presents very precise conceptions in an orderly manner.  --Warm Regards, Bruce