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Please correct this notebook entry My highway bus from Osaka reached Tokyo at 5:30 am. Althogh I could sleep a bit , I felt really tired when I got off. Especially my neck and back hurted. So I wanted to take a bath in order to relax. It took 5 hours to find an internetcafe with showr room・・

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Please correct this notebook entry

Today the highway bus from Osaka reached Tokyo at 5:30 am.
Although I could sleep a bit, I felt really tired when I got off.
Especially my neck and back hurted,  (((The word "hurt" is present future and past tense.)))
so I wanted to take a bath in order to relax.
It took 5 hours to find an internetcafe with a shower room.




よいでしたよ。みかーさんのべんきょうはがんばる。



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Please correct this notebook entry

My highway bus from Osaka reached Tokyo at 5:30 am.
Although I could sleep a bit , I felt really tired when I got off.
Especially My neck and back especially hurted.
So I wanted to take a bath in order to relax.
It took 5 hours to find an internetcafe with a shower room・・

It's interesting, for the present tense you would say,
my neck hurts.
For the past tense you would say,
my neck hurt.

But then for two objects you would say in the present tense,
my neck and back hurt.
For the past you would say,
my neck and back hurt.

This blows my mind. 
You can't tell from the sentence if the person is talking about hurting now or hurting in the past.
To emphasize that it was in the past, I would say " When I got off the bus, my neck and back hurt badly."
Or, "My neck and back were hurting really bad."



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My highway express bus from Osaka reached Tokyo at 5:30 am.  Althogh Although I could sleep a bit, I felt really tired when I got off, Especially and my neck and back hurted were hurting.  So, I wanted to take a bath in order to relax.  It took 5 hours to find an internetcafe internet cafe with showr a shower room.

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Hello Mika,

You are doing well, and generally the words are in proper order. If by "highway bus" you mean a fast bus that goes on the highway, instead of a bus that just travels on the little roads, making many stops, we would say in the U.S., an "express bus." 

I noticed some misspellings.  OpenOffice Writer used to be a free word-processing application with a spellcheck feature.  You may like to find out if you can download a free copy to help with spelling English words. 

Good luck.  
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What's it like? Me: "I'd like to use the internet for an hour." Sales lady: "Sure thing. Would you like a shower with that?" Me::"You know what, Yes. Yes I'd like a shower. After being on the internet, i hate feeling dirty. What kind of soaps do you have?"
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An internet cafe with a shower? Man, Japanese people are so cool!

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