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My name is Ade Perdhana
Hello, my name is Ade Perdhana Putra. I am twenty years old and I come from Surabaya, Indonesia. My daily activities are seeking a job and learn other languages, English and French.
I have am a bachelor's degree on Information System, Industrial Technology Faculty, UPN Veteran East Java. I went to college for five years.
Some activity what i did on college are learnt how to make a good information system application. Since user requirement analysis until evaluate application. I often create information system projects. For example, I have created hotel information system, emplyment information system, and procurement information system.*
I am friendly. I like make a new friends and try new things* something new.
Thank you. Maybe it helpfull.
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Most of my corrections are similar to those of the previous corrector. The * indicates suggestions as far as wording. I am also a bit confused with the second sentence in the third paragraph. I could understand the majority of your post (aside from the jargon). Good job!
My name is Ade Perdhana
Hello, my name is Ade Perdhana Putra. I am twenty years old and I come from Surabaya, Indonesia. My daily activities are seeking a jobs and learning other languages like English and French.
I have a bachelor's degree in Information System, Industrial Technology Faculty and UPN Veteran East Java. I went to college for five years.
Some activities what i did in college were learnt how to make a good information system application. Since user requirement analysis until evaluate application. I often create information system projects. Example: Hotel information system, emplyment information system, or procurement information system.
I am friendly, I like make a new friend and try something new.
Thank you. Maybe it helpful.
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Not sure about the sentence in italics. :(
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