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Paris I've been in Paris for two days in this month with my school trip. I think i'm in love with this town. The Seine and The Eiffel tower in night are one of the most beautifull things I've ever seen. Lights, pink sky, music... i really felt that I'm alive. I think i'm jealous, I envy everybody who live in this town, and who has that view for all the time, it's not fair. But i need to improve my language command, really, I was feeling like a mim artist when i tried to talk with sb, you know, 3 words 10 moves of body, but I'm quite proud of myself, because all in all I was able to communicate when it was necessary.

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Paris

I've been in Paris for two days in this month with my school trip. I think I'm in love with this town. The Seine and the Eiffel tower at night are two of the most beautifull things I've ever seen. Lights, pink sky, music... I really felt that I'm alive. I think I'm jealous - I envy everybody who lives in this town, and who has that view for all the time. It's not fair. However, I need to improve my language command, really. I was feeling like a mime artist when I tried to talk with sb, you know, 3 words, 10 moves of body, but I'm quite proud of myself, because all in all I was able to communicate when it was necessary.

 

[Good job.  Paris is one of my favorites, too.  It's beautiful at night.  Work on shortening your sentences and not put so many phrases together with commas.]

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