Aurora Borealis

In search of the Northern Lights

"A freezing cold! A need to warm up. The Aurora Borealis does not get hot, it just warms up inside you."
Suddenly, the sky began transforming. The lights seemed hauntingly colored, coming from all directions. It was exciting and scary at the same time! The feeling was that we were in a dream or having some kind of hallucination. It was two hours of pure magic! We began to understand why the Aurora Borealis is considered the most spectacular phenomenon on planet Earth. When the sky is full of lights the north is gorgeous! That night we got lucky. It was a great show!

By Clayton Conservani

Great Job! Keep writing! :)

Aurora s Borealis

In search of the Northern Lights

"A freezing (biting) cold! A need to warm up. Aurorae Borealis do not get hot, they just warm your soul. up inside you."
Suddenly the sky begins to transform ing and the lights seem hauntings colored, coming from all directions. It's exciting and scary at the same time! The feeling is that we are like being in a dream or having some kind of hallucination. It was is two hours of pure magic! We begin to understand why the Aurora Borealis is considered the most spectacular phenomenon on planet Earth. When the sky is full of lights in the north, it is always gorgeous! That Tonight we got are lucky. It was is a great show!

By Clayton Conservani

My main reason for adding another correction is to the importance of keeping to a particular tense. You started in the present and changed to the past. I have kept it in the present.