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Positive and Negative Aspects of Sports
When it comes to sports,the majority of people think that exercise is to body what knowledge is to mind.Sports are good for health. As the old saying goes,“running water is never stale and a door-hinge never gets worm-eaten.” Similarly,sports stimulate blood circulation as well as increase the elasticity of skin. What’s more (or you could say "Additionally"),sports make us energetic,teach us cooperation, and optimism about life. That is,we’ll work or study with renewed vigour and determination after playing sports.
However, others hold the belief that there are also disadvantages for playing sports.They can result from many sports injuries, such an acute trauma or overuse of a particular body part. Therefore,what sports result from is just the opposite to what we look forward to.
My view on sports falls between the two viewpoints expressed above. Every coin has two sides,consequently,it is vital that we keep playing sports in appropriate ways.
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