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the global villige. help please!!!correct mine errors if in the world there would be only hundred people the world would be boring. I would think in such village everything each other knew. Problems would be less . Language problems wouldn't arise at all because there would be one language. On the streets there would be less of disorder offenses and theft . The concept "global village" was entered by the Canadian philosopher and culturologist M. Makluen. Today, the term "Global Village" can be used to describe the Internet and World Wide Web. McLuhan described how the globe has been contracted into a village by electric technology and the instantaneous movement of information from every quarter to every point at the same time. people arrive on hard as though they were absolutely nearby, would live in "one village". And so I think that our world now is more similar on global to the village than earlier/ Every day we almost meet in the virtual world.we can see each other on very big distance/ The today's world it is the global village
2013년 6월 20일 오전 10:08
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The Global Village. Help please,correct my errors.

If in the world there had only hundred people the world would be boring. I think in such kind of village everything knew each other.Problems should be less. Language problems won't arise at all because their would be only one language. On the streets there would be less of disorders,offensive harrassments and thefts . The concept "Global Village" was originated by the Canadian philosopher and culturologist M.Makluen. Today, the term "Global Village"  is used to describe the Internet and World Wide Web. McLuhan described how the globe has been squeezed into a village by electrical technology and the instantaneous movement of information from every quarter to every point at the same time. People arrive on hard although they were absolutely nearby, would live in "one village". And so I think that our world now is more similar to the village than earlier days.Every day we almost meet with the new virtual world.We can see each other from huge distance.Today's world is the "Global Village".

 

It was very well written, but you have bit tenses problem and about that green line, I didn't understand it. So, I tried but I've made mistakes as well.

2013년 6월 20일
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