describe what life was like when you were a young child When I were a young child, I lived with my parents and my sister in my hometown. We lived in a small and nice house. There was a fence around my

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describe what life was like when you were a young child When I were a young child, I lived with my parents and my sister in my hometown. We lived in a small and nice house. There was a fence around my house. It looks so romantic and beautiful. My house was similar to a princess's house. My childhood had many memories in there. Everyday my parents went to the office. Therefore, sometimes I and my sister were at home, we played everything together such as dolls, toys, etc. When I went to the school, I felt so happy because I could meet my friends and my teacher. For me, school was a different world which I could discover many new things in my life. At the weekend, I visited my grandparents with my family. I met and played with my cousins. It' was really unforgetable memories in my childhood.

2013년 11월 3일 오후 2:40

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Describe what life was like when you were a young child

When I were was a young child, I lived with my parents and my sister in my hometown. We lived in a small and nice house. There was a fence around my house. It looks looked so romantic and beautiful. My house was similar to a princess's house. My childhood had many memories in there. Everyday my parents went to the office. Therefore, sometimes my sister and I were at home alone and we played everything together such as dolls, toys, etc. When I went to the school, I felt so happy because I could meet my friends and my teacher. For me, school was a different world which I could discover many new things in my life. At On the weekends, I visited my grandparents with my family. I met and played with my cousins. It was They were really unforgetable memories in from my childhood.

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I think it sounds better if you don't write "my" twice. For example, "my parents and my sister" can be written as just "my parents and sister", while "my friends and my teacher" can be simply rewritten as "my friends and teacher".

2013년 11월 7일