First notebook entry: Introducing myself
Hey!! I'm Douglas, i'm from Brazil and i do the course in business administration and i want live in Canada in next year..therefore, I must learn and master English as quickly as possible and count on the help of you.
I thank God and you for this opportunity.
God bless you all
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First notebook entry: Introducing myself
Hey! I am Douglas. I am from Brazil and I am doing a course in business administration. I want to live in Canada next year. Therefore, I must learn and master English as quickly as possible. I am counting on your help.I thank God and you for this opportunity.
God bless you all.
You must use a capital letter always for I. It is not optional.
Contractions are used more in speech than in writing. The reader can decide whether or not they want to use a contraction. It is not wrong though to use I'm in writing but it is not necessary.
I do the course. Here you need the present continuous. I am doing a course or I am taking a course.
A course sounds better than the course in this context. - It is not the only course. It is one of many. So the indefinite article sounds better - well in English it does.
I want live. The second verb 'live' needs to be in the infinitive. 'to live' What you have put sounds in English like: Eu quero vive em vez de eu quero viver.
You do not need to make sentences longer than necessary by using 'and' to artificially link them together.
Bom dia.
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First notebook entry: Introducing myself
Hey!! I'm Douglas and I'm from Brazil. I'm taking a course in business administration and I want live in Canada inext year..Therefore, I must learn and master English as quickly as possible! I count on you to help me!I thank God and you, for this opportunity.
God bless you all.
(I live in Canada, It's really great here! ^_^)
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