Asami
my first entry Hi. Suddenly,I was tired today. Because I searched it with PC all day. I am looking for a cheap airline ticket. This is very tough. So, I learn English. I can not remember. But I do my best.
2014년 2월 20일 오후 1:55
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my first entry

Hi.
Suddenly, I was tired today,. Because because I searched it with a PC all day.
I am looking for a cheap airline ticket. This is very tough.
So, I learn English. I can not cannot remember. , But but I do my best.

 

1) Suddenly means something occured without prior indication, think a loud noise that startles

2) don't start a sentence with because or but

 

2014년 2월 20일

my first entry

Hi.
Today I felt tired. I worked on the computer all day.
I  looked for a cheap airline ticket. It was difficult.
So, I want to learn English. It is hard to remember the words.
But I will try. 

2014년 4월 20일

My First Entry:

Hello everyone, 

I am very tired from what I did today. I searched with a PC all day Because  I am looking for a cheap airline ticket. This is very tough. So, I am learning English. I cannot remember everything, but I do my best.

2014년 3월 12일
Hi, Asami. I can try to help you.
2014년 7월 5일
Hey send me a friends request and we can skype chat so i can help you better your english speaking skills.
2014년 4월 20일
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