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IETS6 TEST2 WRITING TASK2 Some people think it is justified that successful sports professionals make much more money than people in other essential professions while others have an opposite opinion. It is not easy for athletes to become successful, so they have to devote themselves to achieve success. Many of them are sent to the professional training centre when ther are little. They live in the centre without their parents and they are too busy on training that barely have time to be with their family and friends and even have no time for school. In other word, they have lost their childhood and ordinary life. As some sports may be dangerous, some of them could get injured or even become disabled when they are training. As much as they have got to devote, it is understandable that they earn more money. Another reason for people supporting the successful athletes to make more money is that they are not only successful sports professionals but also role models for the younger generation. By practicing really hard, they represent out country to play in national games, our country is honored and people are inspired by their performance. They become role models to affect the youths in a positive way. Other people think it is unfair that people who work in other important professions earning less money as they work so hard to provide a stable environment for people to live. For example, biologist spend much time at wild to observe the changes in biodiversity which are intensively relating to us human beings. However, they are not as rich as the successful athletes. In my opinion, it would be better not to judge if they deserve the money they earn on what professions they are in but on the accomplishments they have and the effects they post on other people.
2014년 7월 4일 오전 2:58
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IETS6 TEST2 WRITING TASK2

Some people think it is justified that successful sports professionals make much more money than people in other essential professions while others have an opposite opinion.

It is not easy for athletes to become successful, so they have to devote themselves to achieve success. Many of them are sent to the professional training centre when ther are little. They live in the centre without their parents and they are too busy on training that barely have time to be with their family and friends and even have no time for school. In other word, they have lost their childhood and ordinary life. As some sports may be dangerous, some of them could get injured or even become disabled when they are training. As much as they have got to devote, it is understandable that they earn more money.

Another reason for people supporting the successful athletes to make more money is that they are not only successful sports professionals but also role models for the younger generation. By practicing really hard, they represent outour country to play in nationalinternational games, our country is honored and people are inspired by their performance. They become role models to affect the youths in a positive way.

Other people think it is unfair that people who work in other important professions earning less money as they work so hard to provide a stable environment for people to live. For example, biologist spend much time at wild to observe the changes in biodiversity which are intensively relating to us human beings. However, they are not as rich as the successful athletes.

In my opinion, it would be better not to judge if they deserve the money they earn on what professions they are in but on the accomplishments they have and the effects they post on other people.

2014년 7월 4일
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