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Battlelfield. Battlelfield. First part. Yesterday I was at the military festival " Batlefield". There were interactive historical areas to visit at this festival. Every area had form fortified military camps with different armaments and layouts. Those areas represented in the main three countries in different military times. ...to be continued...
2014년 7월 23일 오후 7:53
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Battlelfield.

Battlelfield.
First Part 1.
Yesterday I was at the military festival " Batlefield".
There were interactive historical areas to visit at this the festival.
Every area had form fortified military camps with different armaments and layouts.
Those these areas represented in the main mostly represented three countries in during different military times.
...to be continued...

 

Overall this was easily understandable, my corrections are what english speakers would normally say in the same context. But this depends on the person.

2014년 7월 23일
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