Vivi
myself Hello everybody! I am a chinese girl and you can call me vivi. I am 24 years old. Now , I am a worker in an office. I like noodle, rice, hot pot and some spicy food. haha.... I like singing, dancing and some aerobics. I love sunny. love smile . haha .... my english is very poor ,but i am learning it . I will come on!
2014년 7월 26일 오전 3:52
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Myself

Hello everybody! I am a Chinese girl and you can call me Vivi. I am 24 years old. Now , I am a worker in an office. (I am working in an office/ I am currently working in an office/ I am an office worker/ I am currently an office worker) 

<em>You don't really need the word "currently", because you already wrote "I am". Since "I am" is present tense, people will understand that working in an office is what you are doing now. </em>

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I like noodles, rice, hot pot and some spicy food. haha.... I like singing, dancing and some aerobics. I love the sunny. <em>"I love the sun" is a little weird though, you'd probably want "I love sunshine/ I love sunny days" instead</em>

I love to smile . haha .... my English is very poor, but i am learning it . I will come on improve!

加油! :D

2014년 7월 26일
Your English is better than you think . Keep up the good work.
2014년 7월 26일

myself

Hello everybody! I am a chinese girl and you can call me vivi. I am 24 years. I currently work in an office. I like noodles, rice, hot pot and some spicy food. haha.... I like singing, dancing and some aerobics. I love when it is sunny. I love smiling . haha .... my english is very poor ,but i am learning to improve my language skills.

2014년 7월 26일

Myself

Hello everybody! I am a Chinese girl and you can call me Vivi. I am 24 years old. Now, I am a worker in an office. <em>(Or "I am currently an office worker.")</em>  

I like noodles, rice, hot pot and some spicy food. haha.... I like singing, dancing and some styles of aerobics. <em>(Or "I like singing and dancing, and I like doing aerobics a little."  I'm not sure which you mean.)</em>

I love sunny days. love smile . haha .... My English is very poor, but I am learning it.  I will improve come on!

<em>Well done, Vivi!  That was a nice, varied introduction!</em>

2014년 7월 26일
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