diego
hello everybody hello mi name is diego, actually, im teacher of high school in my country Colombia, i live in bogota, I am thirty years old and my best wish is to learn english and meet friends, thanks,
2014년 8월 21일 오후 10:27
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Hello, everybody.

Hello, my name is Diego.  Currently, I am a high-school teacher in my country, Colombia. I live in Bogota. I am thirty years old and my greatest wish is to learn English and make friends. Thanks.

<em>I hope your wish comes true!  I corrected your punctuation too.  You needed to put full stops where you placed commas.  </em>

<em>Use capitals for proper nouns.  </em>

<em>"Meet friends" is different to "make friends".  The latter is the process of acquiring new friends.  I think this is what you meant.</em>

<em>Kind regards, Michael </em>

2014년 8월 21일

Hello. mi My name is diego Diego.  actually. I’m a high school teacher in my native (added for clarity) country Colombia. I live in Bogota. I am thirty years old and my best (“best” is not really needed, but you could use the word “greatest” instead) wish is to learn english English and meet friends. Thanks.

 

 

Great job!  Keep wiriting.

2014년 8월 22일

hello everybody

hello mi name is diego, currently, im a high school teacher in my country, Colombia, i live in bogota, I am thirty years old and my greatest wish is to learn english and make friends, thanks,

2014년 8월 21일

hello everybody

hello mi name is diego, currently, im teacher of high school in my country. Colombia. i live in bogota. I am thirty years old and my greates wish is to learn english and make friends, thanks,

2014년 8월 21일
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