Diego
A dangerous experience Last month, my family and I wanted to go on holiday to Almería to visit the city and the stay for some days in a hotel near the beach. So, for a weekend we got up early to set off in the morning. Two hours later, while my father was driving, suddenly a dog came across the road. My father avoided it but the car got off the motorway. The vehicle ran along the countryside until it stopped. When we finally could get off the car, everyone was fine, even the animal. Then we called the roadside assistance and we came back home. Now that dog is our pet. His name is Rocky.
2014년 8월 28일 오전 11:56
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Hola Diego,

 

That is a harrowing story, and you're all very lucky to be alive. Rocky is also very lucky to find a family that loves him :)

 

A Dangerous Experience

Last month, my family and I wanted to go on holiday to Almería to visit the city and the stay for some a few days in a hotel near the beach. So, for a one weekend we got up early to set off in the morning before sunrise/before breakfast.

Two hours later, while my father was driving, a dog suddenly a dog came ran across the road. My father managed to avoided it but the lost control of the car got and ran off the motorway. The vehicle ran along skidded on the countryside off the road until it stopped.

When we finally could get off got out of the car, everyone was fine, even the animal. Then We called the roadside assistance and we came back home. Now, that dog is our pet. His name is Rocky.

2014년 8월 28일

A dangerous experience

Last month, my family and I wanted to spend a fews days on holiday in on holiday to Almería, to visit the city and the stay staying some days in a hotel near the beach.  So, for a weekend We got up early to set off in the morning. and set off for the weekend.

Two hours later, while my father was driving, a dog suddenly ran a dog came across the road. My father avoided it but the car was forced off got off the motorway [both "motorway" <em>or</em> "highway" can be used, "highway" tends to be American]. Our car continued traveling  The vehicle ran along the countryside until it stopped.

When we finally could get off the car, everyone was fine, even the animal. Then we called the roadside assistance and we came back ["came back" is fine, but you could also use "returned"] home. Now that dog is our pet. His name is Rocky.

 

[This read really well, just a few minor suggestions]

2014년 8월 28일

A dangerous experience

Last month, my family and I wanted to go on a holiday to Almería to visit the city and the to stay for some a few days in a hotel near the beach. So, for a weekend we got up early to set off in the morning for the weekend.

Two hours later, while my father was driving, suddenly a dog came across the road. My father avoided it but the car got went off the motorwayhighway. The vehicle ran along the countryside until it stopped.

When we finally could get off out of the car, everyone was fine, even the animal. Then we called the for roadside assistance and we came back home. Now that dog is our pet. His name is Rocky.

2014년 8월 28일
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