My new life. Two mouthes ago , i took courses in shanghai form shandong . I was very luckly to start my new life in Shanghai where i looked forward to living all the time. I was attrac

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My new life. Two mouthes ago , i took courses in shanghai form shandong . I was very luckly to start my new life in Shanghai where i looked forward to living all the time. I was attract by everything. Three days ago , i got in touch with a new tool that can improve my English . I knew some new firend . I was very glad that i can make firends with foreign who come from different country.My life became more and more different and i love my new life . 2014.10.21

2014년 10월 21일 오전 8:04

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I can't correct all, but I found some mistakes in ur essay. : "Two months(not monthes) ago, "I" not "i", "lucky" not "luckly", "live" not "living", "attracted" not "attract", "friends" not "firend", "foreigners" not "foreign", "countries" not "country", and you life has been changing/has changed so u shouldnt use "became"

2014년 10월 21일

My new life.

Two mouthes ago ,I took courses in shanghai form shandong . I was very luckly to start my new life in Shanghai where i looked forward to living all the time. I was attracted by everything. Three days ago , I got in touch with a new tool that can improve my English . I knew some new firends . I was very glad that i can make firends with foreigners who come from different countries.My life becomes more and more different and I love my new life . 2014.10.21

2014년 10월 21일

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