The Victim I'm on the corner of the subway surrounded by people, looking discreetly for my next victim, while in my mind review my plan. Suddenly on the other corner I see my victim. This time I pic

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The Victim I'm on the corner of the subway surrounded by people, looking discreetly for my next victim, while in my mind review my plan. Suddenly on the other corner I see my victim. This time I pick out a well dressed man, half asleep, he ignorant of what is about to happen to him. "You are going to be my victim" I say to myself. We look at each other and then I attack him. "Hi" I say to him while I walk to the doors, "what've you been up to?" "Long time no see!" . He look at me confused. The doors close and I see with satisfaction the doubt on his face. "Poor man" I say to myself. He is going to spend all the day thinking about who was that person who said to him "Hi". And I can't wait until to tomorrow for my next victim.

2014년 11월 27일 오후 4:57

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The Victim

I'm on the corner of the subway surrounded by people, looking discreetly for my next victim, while, in my mind, I review my plan. (This is ok in this order with the addition of the comas ad the word I, but I would word it ... while I review my plan in my my mind)
Suddenly, on the other corner I see my victim. This time I pick out a well dressed man, half asleep, he ignorant of what is about to happen to him. "You are going to be my victim" I say to myself.
We look at each other and then I attack him. "Hi" I say to him while I walk to (I would say towards) the doors, "What've you been up to?" "Long time no see!". He looks at me confused. The doors close and I see with satisfaction the doubt on his face.
"Poor man" I say to myself. He is going to spend all the day thinking about who was that person was who said to him "Hi" to him. And I can't wait until to tomorrow for my next victim.