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Hi:) I'm Natsumi. Finally I write! I've been busy this week. I'm Natsumi live in Japan.28 years old. I'm studying English.But I don't improve my English skill so much. I want to talk in English to improve English skill. I like reading books(especially I like Scandinavian mystery),visiting many cafes,sleeping,listening to music and playing the drums(but I have no time). Oh I like to watching FRIENDS.I watch it everyday! I might I can't reply soon in weekdays but nice to meet you:)
2015년 2월 21일 오전 10:55
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Hi:) I'm Natsumi.

Finally I have time to write!
I've been busy this week.

I'm Natsumi, i live in Japan and i'm 28 years old.
I'm studying English but I havn't improved my English skill very much.
I want to talk in English to improve my English skill.

I like reading books (I especially like Scandinavian mystery), visiting many cafes, sleeping, listening to music and playing the drums(but I have no time).
Oh I like to watching FRIENDS. I watch it everyday!

I might I can't reply soon in weekdays but nice to meet you :)

 

<em>I'm not sure about the last sentence, but your English is pretty good :)</em>

2015년 2월 21일

Hi:) I'm Natsumi.

Finally I have time to write!
I've been busy this week.

I'm Natsumi, I live in Japan and I'm 28 years old.
I'm studying English, but I haven't improved my English skill very much.
I want to talk in English so I can improve my English skill.

I like reading books (I especially like Scandinavian mystery), visiting many cafes, sleeping, listening to music and playing the drums (but I have no time).
Oh I like to watching FRIENDS. I watch it everyday!

I might I can't reply soon in weekdays but nice to meet you :)


注釈:

なつみさんの英語の文法はいいです。これはなつみさんへ私の注釈です。
(Sorry, my Japanese is at the beginner level)

1. 'I have time to write' and 'I can finally write' are both OK to use.

2. Because you are talking about you (Natsumi), use a comma (,) and <em>I</em> to combine the sentences.

3. Different verb tense and added very

4. Ask yourself: Why do you want to talk in English? (なぜなつみさんは英語をお話していますか?) 

                    So you can improve your English

5. When you have a comma (,) or a period (.), a space is always needed before the next word/sentence.

(This works for parentheses too, they need a space before the first one - () or [] )


6. "I can't always reply on the weekdays, but it's nice to meet you! :)" makes a bit more sense as a sentence.


スティーグ・ラーソンの本が好きですか。

If you have questions about the corrections... おしえてください!You can message me anytime!

2015년 3월 29일

Hi:) I'm Natsumi.

Finally I write wrote!
I've been busy this week.

I'm Natsumi live in Japan.and I'm 28 years old.
I'm studying English.But I'm improving my English skill so much.
I want to talk in English to improve my English skill.

I like reading books(especially I like Scandinavian mystery),visiting many cafes,sleeping,listening to music and playing the drums(but I have no time).
Oh I like to watching FRIENDS.I watch it everyday!

I might I can't reply soon in weekdays but However,nice to meet you:) (however sounds better)

2015년 3월 15일

Hi:) I'm Natsumi.

Finally I have time to write!
I've been busy this week.

I'm Natsumi. I live in Japan. I'm 28 years old.
I'm studying English, But haven't improved very much.
I want to talk in English to improve my English skill.

I like reading books(especially Scandinavian mystery),visiting many cafes, sleeping, listening to music and playing the drums(but I have no time).
Oh, I like to watch FRIENDS. I watch it everyday!

I might not reply right away on weekdays but nice to meet you:)

2015년 3월 8일
Hi Natsumi, nice to meet you, we can practice english conversation? My skype Kishizin, I'm a brazilian guy, living in Brazil, I was in Japan, for 3 years, i need to practice japanese too, i was fluent but i don't use japanese for 7 years ;/ .. .Help me please, I'm sure we can improve our english language skills on skype! ;)
2015년 3월 1일
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