short story. Could someone correct this for me? Thanks

One day, I was driving on my way to work and then suddenly, a cat crossed the street through my car, so I ran over it. him, at the same time Also, a car crashsed into my car at the same time.-

short story. Could someone correct this for me? Thanks

One day, I was driving on my way to work and when suddenly a cat crossed through in front of my car, so I ran over him. At the same time another car crashed into my car mine.-

Oh dear. I hope that was a trory and not a real event!

My corrections are in red and my suggestions to sound more natural are in blue/grey.